Sunday, March 10, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors 03-10-2013

It's that time, again. Time for another 8 sentences from Eternity's Price. This scene is about a week after Catie's arrival. She is in the hotel lobby people watching when Elijah notices her there and comes over to talk to her. Eli was pouting about not having seen her since that first night. When she explained that she didn't want to bother him since he had two businesses and a Family to run, this conversation takes place:

"Well, not only are you my friend, but you are a member of my Family and a guest at my hotel. It's my job to make sure you are settling in okay."

"I guess I've just been being silly, haven't I? This really is a lovely hotel, by the way. And I am not just saying that because it's yours."


"Yes, you have been being silly. That's okay, though. I rather like you that way."


I hope that this little snippet does a decent job of showing something of their relationship. Next week's snippet will be from the scene that starts main plotline. Don't forget to check out the other great writers over at www.wewriwa.com And I am happy to report that I am back on my laptop, so I can once again comment on posts. I may not get to do many today, as my sister is coming over, but I will get to them Monday.

Come back on Monday for "positive thinking Monday."

14 comments:

  1. Very neat 8! This snippet does show their relationship, good job!

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    1. Thanks. They really are a lot of fun together, but it can be hard to show that in just 8 sentences.

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  2. I get the sense from this that they're interested but reserved. Definitely lots of prospects here! Looking forward to reading more.

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

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    1. Yeah... They've loved each other for forever, but neither one of them has been able to admit it even to themselves, yet. Eli is getting there, he's all kinds of confused. Catie... figures it out in a few days.

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  3. Okay...why is she silly? Inquiring minds want to know! Great 8!

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    1. Oh, just because she came here to see him, then practically avoided him for a week because she "didn't want to bother him" - and never mind that part of 2 of his 3 jobs is to make sure she's settling in all right.

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  4. Interesting little snippet, raises a few questions, can't wait to see more!

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    1. Thanks. And questions are good. LOL

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  5. Interesting. Nice sense of how they relate to one another.

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    1. Glad you liked it. I kept going back and forth between these sentences and the ones leading up to them.

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  6. I agree with Joyce about there being some reservations there- a hesitant atmosphere almost.
    It does make me curious what she has been being silly about...
    ~Summer
    My 8 sentences

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    1. Hehe Eli is already confused about how he feels about Catie. And I think that there might be a part of her that is starting to question things herself. And she's just been silly about not wanting to "bother him" when it's actually his job to make sure she's settling in okay.

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  7. Awww, loved the playfulness between them. Great 8!

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    1. Thanks. I like getting to write that side of them. And you haven't seen anything yet - though the playfulness is going to go away for a bit...

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