Saturday, February 16, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors 02/17/2013

Today is my first week participating in the Weekend Writing Warriors blog hop. Seems like an interesting idea, and I'm looking forward to reading the other posts. The concept is pretty simple - post 8 sentences of your own writing, then go around to the other participants' pages and read and comment on their posts. I'm going to be posting snippets of Eternity's Price, the paranormal romance I'm working on.

I had a hard time deciding what to post. I knew that I wanted to do something from Catie and Eli's first scene together, but there were a few different snippets that I could have posted. I eventually decided on the last 8 sentences of the scene. A bit of background: Catie has just arrived in town, and has gone to see Eli, who was not expecting her. His reaction to her through the whole scene is kind of funny, I think, but the last few lines really summed up what has been going on with him. So that's why I chose to post that part.



He nodded, then stood up to give her a hug. "I'm glad you're here. And I hope that you decide to stay."

She smiled at him then walked out of the office.

He sat down and put his head in his hands. What the hell was wrong with him? Catie was one of his best friends, and there were about a million reasons why it needed to stay that way. But she walked in that door and for one second it almost seemed like his heart had started beating again. 


Just a little note for the wewriwa folks. This is a work currently in progress. I'm still writing the first draft, so it  may be a bit rough. Any comments or critique are more than welcome. And for everyone else, check out the other participants here

Finally, check back on Wednesday for my weekly ramble.

20 comments:

  1. Awe, I like it! What a sweet scene. I love it when a male protagonist is so candid. Good last sentence. It makes me wonder what happened to the guy that he felt as though his heart quit beating. Or, (per the genre) is his heart really not beating?? :-)

    Nice snippet!

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    1. Thank you! Yeah, I'm not giving anything away by saying that they're vampires. Eli's heart stopped beating over 200 years ago. LOL That line actually came from me going "what the heck would be the vampire equivalent to someone's heart skipping a beat? Having it START beating again, of course."

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  2. Oh this looks interesting. I didn't even guess the vampire part. Do you hold of letting the reader know that or do we know from the start?

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    1. No, it's clear from the start. The very first scene includes Catie eating.

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  3. I was intrigued by the last sentence. All makes sense now. Great extract!

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  4. Oh dear, he's got problems! Once he starts thinking of her in that way, he isn't going to be able to stop. I'm fascinated by the fact he's a vampire, didn't see that coming - going to be very interesting to read more!

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    1. Hehehe Yes, he's got problems, all right. Thank you.

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  5. Oh my goodness! That last line is wonderful.

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  6. Welcome! nicely done - and is the vampire assumption correct?

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    1. Thank you. And yes, they're vampires.

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  7. Oh! I just want to give him a hug! Poor Eli.

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    1. Aww... And things are going to get worse, still.

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  8. You chose well, this is a great snippet to show his conflicted feelings. Am SO curious...great 8!

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  9. Yeah, he's a goner, that's clear! Fun and emotional at the same time. Now of course we have to know how he handles this conflict :)

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  10. Yeah, he's a goner, all right. Thank you. Things certainly are going to get interesting for them... LOL

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