Saturday, July 13, 2013

Wewriwa 07-14-2013 - Being vulnerable

Welcome back everyone. It's Sunday, again. Which means another snippet from my paranormal romance in progress, Eternity's Price. My poor little idiots have been on quite a roller coaster the past few weeks, and it doesn't seem to be getting easier quite yet. There is probably going to be another scene in between last week's and this week's - but since I haven't WRITTEN it yet, I obviously need to skip it for now.

This is from the next night, after the concert from Hades that resulted in them breaking up. Catie has gone to the arcade to "beat the crap out of the poor little plastic moles" in the Wac-A-Mole game. Eli has tracked her down and is trying to get her to talk to him. She's still hurting a LOT, though, which is causing him to just pour his heart out to her - in the middle of the arcade. This is part of one of his speeches.

"My previous girlfriend died, not three weeks ago. And I turned to you in my pain, and I found you standing there. For the first time in my life, I turned to find someone waiting for me to talk to them. It scared the life out of me. I have been alone most of my life and I have never been so terrified as I was at that moment. I have never been so vulnerable as I am being right now. The whole concept scares me. I don't know what to do or how to do it."

Aww... Talk about someone laying their heart out on the line. The question is: will Catie take him back? I guess you're just going to have to come back next week to find out. ;) In the meantime, check out all the other great writers over at

And finally a little musical inspiration. Here's the song I was listening to while writing this scene:

P.S. For some reason youtube doesn't seem to have the actual Garth Brooks version of this song. Slightly annoying, but this version is decent - even though it's not ACTUALLY what I was listening to...


  1. Obviously a really difficult time for both of them, hope they can talk it through. He's so vulnerable - terrific snippet!

  2. heartfelt speech - well done!

  3. Great emotional dialogue, and unusual for a guy to speak from his heart, being so vulnerable... she must be special!

  4. He IS being vulnerable, isn't he? What's not to like about that?

    My only question is about the 3 weeks since his girlfriend died... seems a bit soon to be so sure about his feelings for someone new. I totally get that he'd have the feelings, but wouldn't he still be feeling guilt? sadness? etc?

  5. Well, that summarizes what is going on for Eli. I don't think Catie should take him back.
    He got to fix himself up first. Plus he doesn't seem very sincere going from three weeks since his girlfriend dies to I have been alone most of his life. How deep are his feelings for Catie and how deep were is feelings for the previous girlfriend is very obscure.

  6. I missed last week, but this guy sure is pouring out his heart.

  7. What a wonderfully emotional bit of dialogue. Wonderful job. Also, thanks for reminding me how much I love You Move Me. It's been a few years since I've listened to it, now I think it might be time to reacquaint myself with my Garth Brooks collection.